I feel scared and a shiver up my spine. Little rocks are falling on my feet. i see a big group and crumbling rocks i feel like i'm nearly there. i wonder how far the drop is.
moment in time
I feel sad & scared & worried
I see chains & a big crowd
I think this is a circus
I wonder if there more animals here I wonder if i can get out.
Kia ora. I am Daisy from St Mary’s School.
ReplyDeleteI really liked how it felt like I was there and how you described the rocks falling.
Maybe you could add a title for the first one and tell me more about where you were.
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Your writing has really made me feel like I am there Ryder - lots of emotions! Ka pai 😊
ReplyDeleteKia ora. I am Jayda from St Mary’s School.
ReplyDeleteI really liked how you described your writing, you did a really great job!
I learnt how you felt, once you said that you felt scared and worried, I actually knew how you felt and I felt like I was there with you!
Maybe you could put the title at the top because I thought that the mountain one was by itself.
Great job Ryder.
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